No, no, no! Nothing missing. It was simply a bit of a lazy review on my part. Sorry to worry you. I really did like it, and using the migraine to explain the mellower attitude, or at least as a foil for it really did work well in your favor.
I find when writing Albert that you almost have to look for a rhythm in his speech. He's got something like cadence, particularly in his longer monologues, and if you can nail that rhythm, you've figured out how to write the character. Cooper's the tough one for me, because figuring out when to put his randomness in and when to make him stone cold serious is a really tricky tightrope to walk. But given the placement for your story it made perfect sense to have a somewhat rattled, not quite so vicious Albert!
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Date: 2010-07-07 05:34 am (UTC)I find when writing Albert that you almost have to look for a rhythm in his speech. He's got something like cadence, particularly in his longer monologues, and if you can nail that rhythm, you've figured out how to write the character. Cooper's the tough one for me, because figuring out when to put his randomness in and when to make him stone cold serious is a really tricky tightrope to walk. But given the placement for your story it made perfect sense to have a somewhat rattled, not quite so vicious Albert!