Ah, so it seems we're all in agreement: dosage, characterization; no comfort sex, and no mpreg. I feel much better about the story already - this is going to turn out just fine. *g*
Emotional kink - yes, that's it exactly! I have the same reflex with mpreg, and had it with slash for a long time; I'm still quite easily squicked by slash and het alike, by the way, if it's less than tastefully done. But I won't go around writing negative comments on those stories, because as you say, there's no accounting for taste; and any type of fantasy or kink or whatever you call it, is a purely personal thing that can't always be explained in a rational way. And just because it's so personal, it's so easy to feel ashamed or uncertain about it, I guess. For myself, I can bear to be told that aspects of a story are only so-so; however, I don't think I could bear it if someone came and went "I hate your story, because this weird kink of yours is distasteful", even if I know said person had absolutely no right saying that. On the other hand, somewhere there is a line between what's distasteful and what isn't - only, where is it, and who gets to decide that? Rapefic I think is bordering the line pretty hard, and some things, like kicking on child abuse, would plain cross it... But that's a whole other kind of discussion, I guess.
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Emotional kink - yes, that's it exactly! I have the same reflex with mpreg, and had it with slash for a long time; I'm still quite easily squicked by slash and het alike, by the way, if it's less than tastefully done. But I won't go around writing negative comments on those stories, because as you say, there's no accounting for taste; and any type of fantasy or kink or whatever you call it, is a purely personal thing that can't always be explained in a rational way. And just because it's so personal, it's so easy to feel ashamed or uncertain about it, I guess. For myself, I can bear to be told that aspects of a story are only so-so; however, I don't think I could bear it if someone came and went "I hate your story, because this weird kink of yours is distasteful", even if I know said person had absolutely no right saying that. On the other hand, somewhere there is a line between what's distasteful and what isn't - only, where is it, and who gets to decide that? Rapefic I think is bordering the line pretty hard, and some things, like kicking on child abuse, would plain cross it... But that's a whole other kind of discussion, I guess.
About stories: there wouldn't happen to be a print option on that site where you posted your story, would there? I looked for one, but couldn't find any. I'd love to print it out, as 20+ pages is something I'd prefer to read in the sofa, rather than from a computer screen. :)
Incidentally - passé simple? Wow. Haven't come across that since French courses in high school - but of course, I haven't read much French since then. Is it often used in fiction, or was it a deliberate choice of yours?