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sanguinity ([personal profile] sanguinity) wrote in [personal profile] amatara 2011-06-18 02:18 am (UTC)

You finished it! Yay! And oh, it is lovely! :-)

I love how difficult Albert is, refusing to be comforted. "So is passionate murder. That doesn't make it excusable." (Dude, you were six! It is not the responsibility of six-year-olds to have the strength to fix the world! If you ran across a tale like this in your capacity as an F.B.I. agent, you would not be passing moral judgement on him!) (Or leastways, I don't think you would.)

Oh, and I like how at the beginning, knowing that Cooper is likely right in his outlandishness, makes Albert crabbier. I laughed. (And then I had to check to see if anyone was in earshot.)

And you have a very nice eye for descriptive detail. I might have to come back sometime later and try to figure out how you're doing that. ;-)

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